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Life will never be the same.
You will never love me,
You will never realize how much I love you...
You're just a chapter in the book of life
The life that can never be,
Because I don't know when I'll be able to end this chapter,
When I can finally move on...
The chapter keeps getting longer and longer
It's endless
Full of happiness,
Pain,
Misery,
And longing.
I'm all alone
Even when I thought I wasn't,
When I was with you,
I was still alone
I just never realized it
I wish I had,
Or maybe I don't.
I wouldn't have had that happiness you gave me,
The spark of hope,
The flicker of light that life can be truly bearable
But that will never be...
You leave me to my thoughts,
All alone in this cold dark world.
I'm waiting for this chapter to end,
But that can't happen until I straighten things out with you...
Written at lake. It was night, I was on one of my usual nightly bike-rides to the lake by my house to go think. Written 9/27. I just don't know what to do with the guy. He doesn't realize just how much he's affecting me and my life and my feelings...and I hate it. So yeah...

Comments/Critique much appreciated! Any kind...seriously
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:iconmichaelortega:
MichaelOrtega Oct 5, 2010   Traditional Artist
nicely done...
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:iconnader-tharwat:
nader-tharwat Oct 4, 2010  Professional Photographer
This is what im going to do, Waiting On You ;)
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:iconalecwolfe:
This is nice. You have a good message and told it well. Good work.
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:iconmissmouse310:
very deep. i love it
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:iconopiumrooster:
I think a lot of people can relate to this, but I'm having a problem really connecting to it. Like what K4 said I think it's just raw emotion, just lines of how you long for this person but I simply cannot connect to this. And why do you feel such pain for this person. You don't have to make the reason so blunt but at least present in a way. What was it that made you care about this person.
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Itami-Itsumi Oct 2, 2010
but maybe it isnt a chapter, maybe its a history, a novel, a novel you read and reread, that you dont want to stop reading by you havent noticed... that you have allready finish it
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:iconlight-and-darkness24:
Light-and-Darkness24 Oct 2, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Every word spoken here is powerful and true. Good job
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:iconbroken-hearted-girl:
Broken-Hearted-Girl Oct 1, 2010   Writer
i know exactly what you're going thru... there's a guy in my life that is doing the same thing to me... i'm sorry you have to go thru it... it's not fun... but i'm here if you need to vent :hug:
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:iconspectersnake:
What A coincidence, this is what I'm experienceing C;
I like this poem
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:iconk47454k1:
K47454k1 Oct 1, 2010  Professional Writer
I feel a little lost here.
maybe more technique would pull it together?
Or more imagery?
or more poetic description, rather than the abundance of things that are plainly said.
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