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Life will never be the same.
You will never love me,
You will never realize how much I love you...
You're just a chapter in the book of life
The life that can never be,
Because I don't know when I'll be able to end this chapter,
When I can finally move on...
The chapter keeps getting longer and longer
It's endless
Full of happiness,
And longing.
I'm all alone
Even when I thought I wasn't,
When I was with you,
I was still alone
I just never realized it
I wish I had,
Or maybe I don't.
I wouldn't have had that happiness you gave me,
The spark of hope,
The flicker of light that life can be truly bearable
But that will never be...
You leave me to my thoughts,
All alone in this cold dark world.
I'm waiting for this chapter to end,
But that can't happen until I straighten things out with you...
Written at lake. It was night, I was on one of my usual nightly bike-rides to the lake by my house to go think. Written 9/27. I just don't know what to do with the guy. He doesn't realize just how much he's affecting me and my life and my feelings...and I hate it. So yeah...

Comments/Critique much appreciated! Any kind...seriously
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MichaelOrtega Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2010   Traditional Artist
nicely done...
nader-tharwat Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2010  Professional Photographer
This is what im going to do, Waiting On You ;)
AlecWolfe Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2010
This is nice. You have a good message and told it well. Good work.
missmouse310 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2010
very deep. i love it
opiumrooster Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2010
I think a lot of people can relate to this, but I'm having a problem really connecting to it. Like what K4 said I think it's just raw emotion, just lines of how you long for this person but I simply cannot connect to this. And why do you feel such pain for this person. You don't have to make the reason so blunt but at least present in a way. What was it that made you care about this person.
Itami-Itsumi Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2010
but maybe it isnt a chapter, maybe its a history, a novel, a novel you read and reread, that you dont want to stop reading by you havent noticed... that you have allready finish it
Light-and-Darkness24 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Every word spoken here is powerful and true. Good job
Broken-Hearted-Girl Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010   Writer
i know exactly what you're going thru... there's a guy in my life that is doing the same thing to me... i'm sorry you have to go thru it... it's not fun... but i'm here if you need to vent :hug:
SPECTERSnake Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
What A coincidence, this is what I'm experienceing C;
I like this poem
K47454k1 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010  Professional Writer
I feel a little lost here.
maybe more technique would pull it together?
Or more imagery?
or more poetic description, rather than the abundance of things that are plainly said.
nightroad666 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I know how it feels...for me its a girl and even though i keep trying to forget it i cant i just love her soo much i just wish she could see tht...very nice poem
WrittenStar Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Man this is true. I feel the same way.
TheLastIncubus Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010  Student General Artist
:nod: i could DEFINITELY relate to this.
Noctelux Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2010  Student Photographer
im sitting here, missing a guy that's doing the same to me and i come across this poem...
& i know how you feel, i rlly do :/
i feel u :hug:
& its a rlly good piece :heart:
nate25347 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2010
Do you really think is better to straighten things out before you end the "chapter" (as you call it) Just asking. I thought thing should just be left broken...I don't know :O Very nice work!
KuroshikixAlice16 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2010   Traditional Artist
AwwwwwxD so cute!! I really loved how you compared these feelings with the turning pages of a book, and how it's filled with a life's stories and pains within their pages:D. Astounding. And just curious, was it supposed to be:

"I wouldn't have had that happiness you gave me,"?

Instead of: "I wouldn't have had that happiness you game me,"?

Overall, I really adored this poemx3
CaesarAlexander Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Love is painful sometimes. I can relate in a big way to your words. But the pain makes the moment of happiness so much sweeter, you know?
RoxanneVL Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
<3 so much like real life, very powerful!!!
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