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"I love you"
What a silly phrase
Everyone says it
But very few know the true meaning behind it
I guess they want to say it,
Feel like they NEED to say it,
Simply to know someone cares,
At least a little
But how can you pick the real from the fake?
You can't
It's impossible
That's a fact
The fakes are chipper,
Always happy,
While the real smile,
Laugh,
Seem happy…
But it's just an act
They're dying inside
They just don't want people to know
For then they would seem weak
And they've felt weak their entire life,
Because no one knows the true dangers of love
Because no one's strong enough to talk about it
If they were,
People wouldn't long for it so much
They would run away
Far, far away
When you're in love,
It tears at your soul
It eats at your body
Consuming cell after cell
Until you can't take it anymore
You scream
You cry
You bury yourself in blankets
Not because you want to,
But because you have to
These are the people you need to fear
Who may appear weak on the outside,
But can crush lead inside,
Not because they exercise,
Or take care of their body,
But because they survived
And surviving love is one of the hardest obstacles in life
So if you ever come across a person like this,
Remember,
They may seem fine,
But there is dying underneath
Fear them
With all your life
For damaged people are most dangerous,
Because they know they can survive
This was written while I was visiting Latvia with a group of amazing people, and even though I love them to death, I was just feeling EXTREMELY alone and depressed. I personally am not a fan of the ending, but I had to end it, and this is what came up. I would love to hear your views on it though!

Comments/Critique much appreciated! Any kind...not even kidding
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Cry4theDevil Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i know how you feel. I'm surviving one day at a time myself.
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RollingTomorrow Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2011   General Artist
Thank you for submitting to the Critique Folder at :iconwriters--club:! :la:

The opening lines of this piece were both interesting and attention grabbing; people say these words to family members, lovers, and even friends so often without truly thinking of the magnitude that goes with them.

This poem was well presented and made for an interesting read; some portions of it seemed to flow a bit roughly, but it was still a good poem! Keep up the good work! :la:


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conform0rD1e Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010   Filmographer
<3
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JulietsDemise Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
This is one of the most magnificent pieces of poetry I have read in a very long while, I am truly glad i stumbled upon this!!!
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allie-xx Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010
I wasn't too keen on this piece until the very end couplet.
'For damaged people are most dangerous,
Because they know they can survive'.
My gosh, that is just gold.
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DaniiScienceAbuse Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Very good :'3
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kathelyndeb Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010
I almost skipped over this poem thinking it would be just another about the happy 'love'; the one that isn't painful. The one that isn't as true.

It's ironic, because I've written those in the past, without knowing what love is.

But I'm glad I read this poem, it takes a different approach. =)
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Iexwba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010
really good
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FearlessEagle Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010
I like this. But I don't agree with it.

Here is why.

Every human being has scars, and has been in some way or another 'damaged' therefore it's EVERYONE we should fear according to this. While it's true we should probably fear most people....Love is still something that is very much in the human condition. We can't live without it yet many of us would probably have been less scarred without it. I don't think anyone ever truly 'survives' love. Because love changes almost everyone. Without being dramatic I'd say a little part of everyone dies, especially when they love someone and it totally hurts them. Love also magnifies small things often to a great big extent while turning other things that used to matter into things as tiny as Ants. With love people tend to lose their inhibitions. I don't know why I made this long comment. It wasn't supposed to be this long. :P but yea. Good writing.
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Sorari Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow! I love it... especialy the ending! lol

I think I know what you mean. I know a few people who have gone through so much, and have survived it all that you just have to wonder strong are they? It's a bit scary and a bit sad...
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